(Image of Jesus healing a leper sourced from
Wikimedia)
Many of you don't know me; In fact, many of you have never even looked my direction. For years and years, I have waited with bated breath on the side of the cobblestone road that you people walk every day to get to work. You go and you visit with your families for meals, you go and laugh with loved ones at local wineries, and you go about your everyday chores and never bother to look in my direction. While you go go go, I sat in the same spot longing for someone to talk to me. I sat there with skin falling off my very bones, deformities altered my face, and contagiousness left me completely and utterly alone. Day after day, I sat and I could feel my muscles wither away leaving me paralyzed. My skin was discolored and my heart was empty. There were tears, there was sadness, and depression often crippled my bones. I was among those who were infected by disease and labeled as “outcast.” I did not know love, I did not know kindness, and I did not know what compassion looked like, until I saw the face of Jesus.
Jesus is a controversial name and man in this town but He is one of the best people I know. He extends a helping hand to those who need it, He hears those who go unheard, and He reaches the hearts of those who are deemed unlovable. I was touched by this man and I was cleaned by this man. This man made me whole and I am who I am today. Jesus is the reason I can stand before you today and He is the very reason all who are listening will now look upon my face. I once was a leper. I was one of the many people that you dared not to come in contact with. You passed by every single day. I have finally been seen. I have finally felt what it was like to have been known and to be valued. My skin was once discolored and now is normal, my face was once was deformed and now is in place, my heart once was broken and now is whole. I once was infected and now I am clean.
This Jesus saved my life and He can save yours. I am who I am today because a Man, who is of the utmost authority, got down on bended knee and whispered "Be thou clean." While He told me not to go out into the streets and tell of what has been done, I cannot help but shout it from the rooftops. He has healed me and my heart is overflowing. For all my days I will sing His praises. The messiah has come and he has touched my heart and cleaned my wounds. Go forth quickly and see this man named Jesus for He is the real reason we are breathing, moving, and living this blessed life.
I leave you with the same words Jesus left me, "Be thou clean."
Author's Note:
I have read the Gospel of Mark numerous times throughout my life. I’ve heard it in Sunday school, mission trips, and in my own personal quiet times. That being said, the story of Jesus healing the Leper was not new to me. In fact, I practically knew it by heart. The prompt I chose for week 3 was to write a motivational speech. While doing my reading this particular story seemed to jump off the pages and exclaim “Write Me.” I couldn’t say no. It would've been easy to write a speech motivating those in Biblical times from Jesus's
point of view, but I wanted to change it up. I wrote my speech in the leper’s point of view who couldn't help but tell other people of how he had been healed. In fact, Jesus told the leper NOT to tell people, but the Leper couldn't contain his joy or words, in the same way I couldn’t help but write this story. That is one of the most interesting parts to the story I think, the fact that Jesus said don't go tell people. I believe Jesus wanted the healed man to show his gratitude through his actions and not necessarily his words. However, most people including myself will often do the opposite of what we are told and that is exactly what the healed man did. I think this story adds depth to my portfolio, because it shows my heart’s cry. I believe my own beliefs and morals shine through this story. I don’t know this healed man personally, but I do know my heart beats for the Lord in the same way I imagine this man’s does too. I think this story reveals my own values that I carry with me, thus adding substance to my portfolio.
Bibliography:
King James translation of the Gospel of Mark, link to the online reading.
Amanda, what a sweet and emotional story you wrote about the leper that Jesus healed. I was really drawn to the bittersweet tone of the narration. I was wowed by the way it made me feel for the leper and I was almost a little sad for him. I know you've never been in his shoes, but you sure made me feel like you knew exactly what he was talking about. I wonder about what happened to him after he was healed. This was the answer--he was changed forever. While we don't know what happened to him totally, we know that he is happier than he was before. Did he get a job or find a community? I wonder about the tangible things, now that I know his personal needs are met. What if you had said it was Jesus from the beginning that healed him instead of towards the middle and end? I liked that you did it how you did because it left some uncertainty in the minds of those who don't know the story. Overall, I loved it and was very moved by it. Great job Amanda!
ReplyDeleteAmanda, I was going to make a comment on how I thought it was unique that you put it in the point of view of the leper himself, as opposed to Jesus; and you talked about that in your author's note! Many of the stories that we read in the Bible don't tell us what the blind, deaf, or lepers are thinking. I like how you went off script and used a touching story and made it into a powerful speech. The leper is so passionate about Jesus and all the miracles that he makes happen everyday. This was a great story, and it was unique! I haven't read any other biblical stories yet, so good job!
ReplyDeleteAmanda, this story was awesome and gave me chills. You caught my attention right away because you addressed the audience by saying "you" which made me focused on what I had done. I like that you came at it from the point of view of the leper because you were able to add a ton of emotion and feeling that would not have been captured if it were written differently. I wonder how long the man had been a leper. I feel like this fact would impact how he felt about others. I also was thinking about what he looked like while reading it. He was described as looking like what we would think of as a homeless man, but I know he was much worse than that because that is why lepers were such outcasts during this time. I think it would be interesting to hear more about his appearance and physical defects so that the reader could sympathize more with him and really understand how loving Jesus was.
ReplyDeleteWow, Amanda, I really loved how you did this. As a fellow Christian, I really appreciated how you wrote a story based on a biblical story without changing the character of Jesus or treating it in an irreverent way. I think you also did a great job of tapping into just how horrible life would have been for a leper, and the magnitude of Jesus’ healing. Praise be to God!
ReplyDeleteAmanda this is an amazing story. I really enjoy the theme change and the perspective shift from Jesus' point of view to the leper's point of view. A few things I would like to give you feedback on is, a few times when mentioning Jesus as He you forgot to capitalize the h in He, this would just allow the reader less confusion about who you are referring to and give you more consistency throughout the story. One more thing is I would love to see more description about the suffering of the man before he met Jesus and would enjoy seeing some of the spiritual side of his healing before seeing the physical aspect of it. That was what Christ did. He would take care of their spiritual needs and then meet physical needs. Another aspect I would hope to see is a little more description by the man for Jesus. This Man just changed his life forever and eternity. Overall, this is an amazing POV shift and I could definitely put myself in this situation because of what Christ has done for me in my life. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis story overall is awesome! I don't think you could have done a better job in the way you told it. I think the story from the point of view of the leper impacts the story greatly. The story itself is good and really demonstrates Jesus work and kindness, but this point of view makes it seem so much more of a testimonial towards Jesus and more 'in-your-face' of a story.
ReplyDeleteWow I hadn’t thought of making a motivational speech as a story! That is a unique idea you have. I haven’t read the bible though, so I’ll admit I first thought it was about a modern day homeless person, like a Jesus-in-New-York type of thing. I didn’t realize it was way back when until you started talking about disease haha. I wonder what it could be like if you had the leper turn into a minister? He already seems to be preaching, might as well make it official! I really liked how it was addressed as a speech. I could imagine someone up in front of an auditorium reading this speech off. It could also be turned modern day like if Jesus healed HIV or Cancer off homeless people now a days. Just a thought! I really enjoyed your first portfolio piece. I look forward to reading more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteThis story was awesome. You did a really good job describing what the leper looked and felt like. Most people assume lepers are the modern day homeless man, but in reality they were so much worse off. Not only were they outcasted by society, they were physically in pain and hard for others to even look at. I really like that you wrote this from his point of view and showed just how passionate he was about Jesus because he was healed. Jesus heals all of us in different and unique ways and it is important to use that passion we feel towards Him by turning around and spreading it to others.
ReplyDeleteReally beautifully written story Amanda. It’s as if you were meant to write these words and share them with us. I’m really grateful for that. I like how you wrote it as a motivational speech, a speech about love and acceptance. It is often times we forget what Jesus teaches us about being good, kind and so on. It is with the ability to see what Jesus encompasses that really fills are hearts spiritually. It is then that we become happy with ourselves and etc. I the message in your story is really strong, which shows not only your faith but belief that Jesus is all encompassing and wonderful.
ReplyDeleteTo show your story to the point of view of the leper really shows that Jesus loves all the sinners and all of Gods creations, which is clever. It’s also a great reminder for us to be kind to one another.
I'm not going to lie to you or anyone else here. I do not have a specific religion, but I'm very spiritual and I can fully say that this is one of my favorite stories written.
Hey, Amanda! The story was very moving. You could definitely tell that you could relate to the leper, as most of us can in some way or another. This also seems like a great testament to your faith. Your description of the leper's life prior to meeting Jesus was really moving, and his/her newfound will to live through Jesus was beautifully written after. It may help your story if you speak more about how the leper was changed from the inside out. You seem to focus for the most part on how the lepracy and its symptom's were cured instead of how the broken soul of the leper was cured. Just a suggestion! Again, you wrote a very moving story which showcases some of the amazing work that can be done through Christ.
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda! I really enjoyed your story. I think telling the story from the Leper’s point of view was a great choice and added something valuable to the story. I too have grown up reading and hearing this story and I have wondered what went through the Leper’s head when Jesus healed him and how he felt about the change in his life. It added depth to see how he felt before he was healed, how alone and hopeless he felt. It helps amplify just how powerful Jesus is, not that it needs to be amplified at all. It shows that the healing went so much further than just the physical healing; it showed that this man’s soul, heart, and mind were healed as well, which I think is very important to take into account. I like that you took your own beliefs and values and poured them into your story, it is definitely apparent and makes the story that much better. Overall I think you did a great job of adapting the story and making it your own, but also keeping the important aspects and information intact.
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ReplyDeleteI really like the emotion and passion you put into writing this story. Also, making it first person perspective of the leper that was healed by jesus made it that much more personal and emotional. You did a great job of using repetitive phrase and short sentences to make it sound almost poetic in a way. I got wrapped into this story pretty quickly with the tone being so passionate. The way you described the leper in the beginning as an outcast and someone who was often glanced over or someone who people ran away from made me feel compassionate and sympathetic towards the leper. While it is awful that he was turned away by society like that, he was chosen by Jesus as someone more than worth of acceptance and love. What a great way to show that we all need to have a little more compassion for everyone, even the destitute, in our day to day life. Even better was the fact that you included Jesus advising against the leper broadcasting his healing too much but that he did anyways because he was so overcome with joy and love for Christ. This was really moving and I can't wait to read more of your stuff!
Amanda,
ReplyDeleteI was amazed by the way you retold this story! I love it from the preceptive of the leper. This brought the story to a completely new light. The description in this retelling was very vivid and I could picture everything you said. Especially with the paragraph when he is describing how he looked. With his skin falling off and the illness taking over.
You also put great emotion in this story. I felt for the leper. I think having the story being told in first person by the leper adds to the emotion. But the way you describe what he is feeling without actually saying it was done very elegantly.
Very nice Job! I can't wait to read your other stories!
Possibly my favorite thing about this is the fact that your prompt wasn’t necessarily this story itself, but a motivational speech instead. Choosing this story to spin into your speech was not only really clever (it works beautifully), but also very fresh—like you said, it would’ve been way more expected to use one of Jesus’s motivational sermons. I actually read both of the stories in your portfolio, but I felt drawn to commenting on this one, probably because your faith and conviction really shine through in the leper’s words, and that gives it a special resonance.
ReplyDeleteMy only constructive criticism is that you might want to go through and double-check your verbs, because sometimes you slip back and forth between different tenses. Also, this is totally a suggestion, but since you still have some room to work with, you might consider going back through and giving a little more detail about his actual encounter with Jesus. I realize that your main focus is on his speech itself, not necessarily the events, but I think it would add even more depth to this, plus emphasize the connection between the leper and why he feels so strongly about what Jesus has done for him. But this is already a really powerful piece, and I think you’ve done a great job with it.
Oh, this is so great. You have such an amazing talent. I see a lot that when people pick a manner of storytelling, it's very cheesy. Like they go for it to the point of being over the top, but here it's very nicely subtle. Like I didn't feel as though I was being spoken to by a motivational speaker, but felt the overall effect. It was veerrry very well put together and I loved reading it! You're such a great writer :)
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda! First of all, I think it was really interesting how you wrote this story in first person. I have only seen a few people do that this semester and I never think to do it myself in my own stories! I like how you have a previous connection to this particular story so that you could make an even more interesting version of the story. Good job!
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